Subject: Self-introduction

Dear Prof Blackstone,

I would like to take this opportunity to introduce myself. My name is Chun Heng and I graduated in Nanyang Polytechnic with a diploma in electronics, communication and computer; specialized in green technology for my final year. I had always curious how does electronic devices played such as important roles in our daily life thus, looking forward to bringing new innovations and ideas. Eventually, I had chosen Sustainable Infrastructure Engineering(Land) as I hope to gain more knowledge and upgrade myself.

Sustainable Infrastructure Engineering(Land) might not be related to what I had studied during my polytechnic, but it provide a brand new adventurous for my next milestone. I am very glad to attend this module with you as towards  the end of this trimester, I will be able to master new soft skill as well as to improve my communication skills. This will definitely help me to boost up my confident and smoother conversation with different people.
I had a few weaknesses to improve on it. Firstly, difficulty in pronouncing certain English words and grammar errors. Secondly, l lack of self-confident. I would tends to hesitate and stutter at some points of time. This are some of the areas that I hope to work on it.

In terms of strength, I would say that I am quite independent. During my internship attachment, my supervisor was deployed overseas most of the time. Thus, I had to learn everything by myself. It wasn’t easy as the project was irrelevant to what I had gain in my knowledge but still, I manage to overcome it after lots of research had been done and determination.

Overall, I would like to sharpen my communication skills and I believe that it will gives me an advantage when I apply this skill to my daily life. I hope I am able to pick up some soft skill in your class such as giving smoother presentation and better communication with strangers. I look forward to more insight lesson with you in class.

Thank you.

Yours Sincerely,
Chun Heng

Comments

  1. Hi, Chun Heng! It was really interesting to read your letter of introduction blog post. I can relate to how you eventually chose to read a degree that is not related to the course of study back in polytechnic. But like what you said, take it as a new challenge and venture a new chapter in your life.

    There are a few errors I found in this blog post.

    I had always curious how does electronic devices played…
    -- this whole sentence could be better structured i.e. "I always found it interesting how electronics…" 

    This are some of the areas that I hope to work on it.
    -- "This" could be changed to "These" and "it" can be omitted from the sentence.

    The weakness part could be separated to a paragraph on its own. It would make it easier for the reader to identify , I feel.

    Overall it was insightful to read but do be more careful with your grammatical errors. I look forward to working with you in class in the weeks ahead!

    Regards

    John

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  2. Hi Chun Heng,

    Taking the leap of faith to change your course certainly takes courage. I find your blog post an interesting read as you did point out how your internship required you to be not only competent in your work, but also independent.

    I think there is a few errors in your post, do correct me if I am wrong.

    Paragraph 2 line 2, "...but it provide a brand new adventurous for my next milestone..."
    Not quite sure if you're trying to say "brand new adventure for my next milestone". Maybe you can change the structuring of the sentence.

    Paragraph 2 line 5 "I had a few weaknesses to improve on it".
    Should be "I have a few weaknesses to improve on"

    Besides the grammatical errors, I think you still did a good job on the blog post. Well done!

    Cheers,
    Shu Han(Group 1)

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  3. Hello Chun Heng,

    Thank you for your sharing, and i would like to say that it is normal to have conversation anxiety with different people. Similarly i used to have it when i was younger but how i overcame it was to just count to 3 and just approach and talk regardless of the conversation outcome. Slowly but certainly, it had benefited my communication skills and i strongly believe it will help you too.

    Here are some comments i have from your writings,
    1) SIE (land) might not be related to what I had studied during my polytechnic, but it provide a brand new adventurous for my next milestone.
    "SIE (land) might not be related to my obtained diploma, but i am certain the journey will be enriching."
    There is a sentence fragment here as the message does not "sound" but i would have write it in this manner to make it less "choppy".

    2) I believe that it will gives me an advantage.....
    "I believe that it will give me an advantage..."
    There is not need for an "s" since you mentioned an advantage.

    Overall, these are my comments on your writing and I'm confident that if you set your heart to strength your command of English, you will definitely improve gradually by the end of Effective Communication module.

    Yours Sincerely,
    Lewis Tan

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  4. Dear Chun Heng,

    Thank you for the effort with this formal letter assignment. You bravely and concisely describe some aspects of your background, a communication strength and some perceived weaknesses. I'm especially impressed that you are so independent that you could manage your project without supervision. This trait will definitely prove invaluable as you work here at SIT.

    There are some language issues to take not of in this post. Aside from those mentioned by your peers, there is this:

    -- My name is Chun Heng and I graduated in Nanyang Polytechnic with a diploma in electronics, communication and computer; specialized in green technology for my final year. >>> (punctuation/lack of conjunction)
    My name is Chun Heng, and I graduated FROM Nanyang Polytechnic with a diploma in electronics, communication and computer, specializing in green technology for my final year.

    Let's work together to achieve the goals you have set forth for this term. At this point, I'd say strengthening your writing accuracy, even in this post, could be one of those.

    Cheers,

    Brad

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